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The feedback I recieved was very helpful. I decided to make my male character much more rude to bump up the effect of the bad relationship. I also have given my female character more of a connection with her pet to show the difference in how she treats her boyfriend as oppose to a dog. I have made it clear that the boyfriend does not like the dog and he may be a little jealous of how the dog gets treated.

Logistics

a. 3 Characters

1 Male (SEAN)- 20-25yrs old

1 Female (BROOK)- 20-25yrs old

1 Dog (MAX)- Pomeranian

b. How many scenes each actor will be in and the total length of their performances.

Sean (all scenes)- approx 10 min

Brook (all scenes)

Max 3 scences approx 3 minutes
c. The requirements, number, and types of locations.

Location 2136 Westchester Circle

Apartment

d. The number and types of stunts and special effects.

N/A
e. What special costumes and makeup will be required?

N/A

f. What props are required

Camera

Leash

Store bought pizza

Script Breakdown

This is a story that happens all too often. Young couples live together and despite how bad the relationship has become, despite the faults that they both have, they continue to stay in these bad relationships. Both characters have bad qualities (the male more so than the female) but I want to show more so how some women would rather stay in a bad partnership than be alone.

Opening scence

Serves to show that this is a young couple living together and that they have been together for a while. We are also introduced to Max, their dog, who serves to show difference in the way Brook treats her boyfriend and her pet.

First evening- Food conversation

This scene serves to show how small conversations with this couple somehow turn into an argument. This also is a rising action that will feed the later, larger argument.

Finding Camera

When Sean finds the camera in bad shape, this brings rise to how the argument will start.

Climax

the argument where everything comes up

falling action

Brook calming down and calling Sean to come home

Establishing

young couple living together gets up on a typical day and we follow what goes on within thier home, showing a comfortability with each other but lack of communication.

3-4 mins

Rising action

next day

daily activities continue

Sean finds camera in bad shape

2 min

climax

fight

sean leaves

1 min

falling action

brook is upset and paces until she calls sean to make up

1 min

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